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My sleep is starving.

It is shivering sweat like snow
across my shoulders as I sob scream
after scream against your skin;

"sorry, I'm so sorry,
go back to sleep."


I am sad
and struggling to stay
together but you slump
against my sickness
and hold me
anyway.
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry to stop by here again-I just read this for the nth time (it's been a year haha) and I can't tell you just how much I can relate to this. As a person with sleeping problems, it's difficult to get a goodnight sleep without having too much to think and worry and cry over about. So thank you for this. :huggle:
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014
prettyyyy. i love the alliterative second stanza most.
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trembling-knees Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you lovely :heart:
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brokengod--veins Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
</33

I'm speechless-my bad :blush:
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wei-en Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2014
Profound and insightful. I particularly like the connection between My sleep is starving and "sorry, I'm so sorry, go back to sleep."

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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I personally don't have anything in particular to say, other than making a few mentions of people who might be able to comment on this poem better:


For me, its something strong, and it really took my breath away.
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Ashes-Mari3 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Your writing never disappoints.

You had me at:  "My sleep is starving"

Brilliant~! :rose:

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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2013  Student Writer
Wow.
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Aurora9912 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So good.
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