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My sleep is starving.

It is shivering sweat like snow
across my shoulders as I sob scream
after scream against your skin;

"sorry, I'm so sorry,
go back to sleep."


I am sad
and struggling to stay
together but you slump
against my sickness
and hold me
anyway.
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brokengod--veins Jan 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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I'm speechless-my bad :blush:
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Profound and insightful. I particularly like the connection between My sleep is starving and "sorry, I'm so sorry, go back to sleep."

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shehrozeameen Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I personally don't have anything in particular to say, other than making a few mentions of people who might be able to comment on this poem better:


For me, its something strong, and it really took my breath away.
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AshesTwisted Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

Your writing never disappoints.

You had me at:  "My sleep is starving"

Brilliant~! :rose:

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DrippingWords Aug 29, 2013  Student Writer
Hello! Your piece has been featured in my journal! Be sure to check out and support the other artists featured! Have a great day!
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DrippingWords Aug 28, 2013  Student Writer
Wow.
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Aurora9912 Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So good.
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cality Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
All those 's' words are just wonderful; great alliteration, especially the line: 'It is shivering sweat like snow'.

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bloodawni Aug 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hello! I just wanted to let you know that this lovely work of art has been featured in my new feature series, "This Week". You can view the journal here, and please do stop by and have a look at the other wonderful pieces that have been featured alongside yours.
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bloodawni Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This. So much this.

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