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the steady drip drip of it in the kitchen
sink has me grinding my teeth

what a waste you said, and in vain
tried to tighten the taps as I laughed—
a waste!—indeed I am.

you told me, pride is a virtue you seem to be lacking
and I said pride leaves the blinds open and you laughed
and left the the blinds open.

Shiny black patent shoes, I watched as you were
lowered into the ground and wondered if that's where life got you,
if that's where life always got you,

then,
what good is pride anyway?
words and stuff
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Given 2013-04-04
The subtlety in my soul is leaking by ~trembling-knees could be extensively studied, as could the blunt, abrupt message. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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7markus7 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
so much is said in a few lines - and the title is just wondrous - my soul is leaking too !
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Many many congrats on the DD, my lovely. :heart:
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
Congratulations on the well deserved DD! :heart:
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013   Writer
congratulations!
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Tobbii-Desu Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Short and beautiful.
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odyssordain Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
simply beautiful
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vespera Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart: congrats on being showcased, dear!
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PhantomRaven Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow....impressive! A well deserved DD indeed! :iconclapplz:

-Le Phantom :mangapunksai:
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Vampirehugger Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013
The words in this poem are so visual. It's almost as though the emotion itself is something that I could reach out and touch, if that makes any sense. Great use of word choice in this poem! :aww:
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Beautifulrosepeddle Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well worded, it sounds kind of like me.... o_0
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